Are these death notices and if they are are they good, please edit these little if there bad.for my school h/w?

Luke Nelson left this world as a talented lawyer and much loved friend, brother, nephew and son. He will be greatly missed, not only by family and friends, but by everyone he touched. Although he died at the young and tender age of 25, Luke made the most of every opportunity that life threw at him, and proved himself to be a very determined and strong-willed human being. We feel privileged to have known him over his short-lived life, but he will forever remain in our hearts.